提示：本文共有 3298 个字，阅读大概需要 7 分钟。
（声明：原创！未经本人许可，任何人不得转载本文！）
英语高考全国I写作部分明年开始可能是读后续写或者概要写作二选一，读后续写要写得好仅靠高三一年努力是不够的，它离不开高一和高二阶段的积累、锤炼。
新高考作文题型基本确定，但笔者不太建议让学生过早进入模式化的训练，而是提倡开阔思维和视野，根据不同文体进行写作，把文章尽量写长，提高写作的综合能力。这样，进入高三作文专题训练的时候，写作水平自然能够水涨船高。
读后续写的文体多属于记叙文，因此有必要练习记叙文的写作。下面这篇作文是高二的假期习作，题目是“我的第一份保姆工作”My Fist Job As A Baby-sitter，讲述自己做“保姆”照顾小孩子的经历。
习作1
My First Job As A Baby-sitter
My dream of being a kindergarten teacher flooded my brain for long. This summer, I decided to attend my 3 little cousins to gain some experience.
The moment I arrived at their house, they showed up like little angels. However, when they were offered a lovely doll, a fierce fight broke out.
The three girls, grabbing each other’s hair, acted like wild animals. I felt like a peace keeper in a field with howling cats. As time went by, my lack of action made the crowd even more uncontrollable.
I felt so fortunate when my aunt rushed into the house coming to my rescue. And within a few minutes, the three devils were under the control of their mother.
I could have let this chaotic day ruin my dream. Instead, it drove me to learn more about being a responsible baby sitter. No matter how difficult a task can be, I will never give up easily.
作者一直想当一名幼儿园老师，因此描述了今年暑假照顾三个表弟妹的经历。
表弟妹起初很可爱，在作者的眼中是天使little angels，但是因为争玩具而翻脸，打起架来，天使瞬间变成了野兽、恶魔wild animals，情况变得不可控。作者使用比喻和对照的方法，如little angels, wild animals, howling cats和devils，以及a peace keeper，表示小孩子前后表现反差之大。
此外，为了避免重复，作者使用crowd来指代the three little cousins。故事描绘生动，用词丰富形象。后来幸亏孩子的母亲回来了，情况才得到控制。
作者寥寥数语，把瞬间的变化写得很逼真。
习作2
Being 17 without working experience can be a disgrace, so when the chance to look after a little boy came, I thought it would be a useful way to earn some experience. I have always enjoyed playing with little children and longed for this job.
I really looked forward to my first day as a baby-sitter, but as soon as I got to the babies’ home, I began to regret. As their mother went away right after I arrived, they became devils. They kept crying the whole afternoon, saying one word again and again, “Mommy, mommy…”
At the beginning, they only shouted to bring back their mother, but afterwards, my lack of action fueled them, and they took hold of my long hair and broke the glasses on the table.
At last, I lost my temper and shouted, “Shut up, brats!” Unfortunately, their mother came back at this moment and she saw the mess and the crazy me! Fear flooded my brain, I couldn’t say a word.
After I went home, the mother’s blame was still reverberating in my mind. I could have let this worst day ruin my mood, but instead it drove me to strengthen my resolve. I still hope to become a successful baby-sitter, but now I know it is not an easy job and it calls for great patience and skills as well.
作者很擅长拿捏动词的使用，如：my lack of action fueledthem, and they took hold of my long hair, Fear flooded my brain, the mother’s blame was still reverberating in my mind。
使用读后续写的四个评分准则来衡量上面两篇文章：
1. 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
2. 内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；
3. 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
4. 上下文的连贯性。
可以发现，两篇文章虽然与读后续写文章的要求还有一定距离，但也已经出具雏形，体现了故事和词汇的丰富性，时态和语法结构使用准确，上下连接自然。
显然，两篇文章在创造故事的高潮，也就是描绘作者和小孩对峙的激烈程度方面还是略显不足的，在描写由高潮进入故事的结尾也不够耐心，显得很仓促。这些都需要长期的磨练才能达成，绝非一日之功。因此，读后续写需要及早谋划，从高一、高二起多写记叙文。另外。文章结构应包含如下三个方面，故事才比较完整。
合理丰富的想象和推测能力、对峙的激烈程是故事成功与否的重要标准之一。
往期回顾：
英国流行病理学家John Snow如何攻克霍乱难关
2020年全国高考浙江卷读后续写解题思路探讨
教申请留学的同学如何写一手漂亮的自荐信
英雄与命运的抗争——孰胜孰负？
带你领略古埃及文化——狮身人面像和古埃及的拿破仑
看到此处说明本文对你还是有帮助的，关于“故事分享——我的第一份工作”留言是大家的经验之谈相信也会对你有益，推荐继续阅读下面的相关内容，与本文相关度极高！
